In the orange light of the setting sun on the final day of the most perfect summer, the water struggles to snag the last of the scarce rays still settling over the surface. I feel the wet sand squish between my toes and my heels dig deep into the sand. Breathing in the salty air wafting from the all too perfect ocean, I could almost taste the bitter water. Again and again the waves lap at my ankles and splashed delicately against my calves, sending goose bumps all throughout my body despite the warmth of the still-summer air. The wind speaks to me as a long lost friend, waiting for us to be reunited. It wraps around my arms and legs like a silk ribbon, whipping my hair around my head, stinging my face like a host of needles, but causes me no pain. I let out a sad, silent, breath as the greedy horizon claimed the sun from the sky, leaving me alone on the darkened beach.
--Hannah Dutrisac
The description Hannah provides in this is absolutely amazing. She's almost like a mental painter and as she writes more and more on this moment she's adding a little more to the painting she making in my mind. And the painting she left when she was done was a beautiful sunset that didn't have anything left out and it was very clear with no fuzz in the way.
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Great Job kept me entertained throughout the whole paper because of all the details you put into the sights and sounds and feelings and tastes of the ocean!
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